Tuesday, November 24, 2009

The Start to a Tragedy About Snow

Thoughout the day and night it never fails to cease. The sun has yet to be even mearly noticed as night quickly approachs. Snow pounds down upon you whirling and twirling, so much that the sky appears to be pitch black. A girl climbs through a house and makes her way to the garage, so thatshe can truck out to the store in order to purchase ingredients for dinner.
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15 comments:

  1. KatelynNovember 25, 2009 at 3:29 PM

    I think you should try to finish this because I want to know what would happen next.
    ~Katelyn

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  2. KatelynNovember 25, 2009 at 3:30 PM

    Also it's a really good start to the story. The vision of the setting is clear.
    ~Katleyn

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  3. KelseyNovember 27, 2009 at 1:42 PM

    You shoule expand Maggie. I want to know what will happen, and it is a good plot to start with.

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  4. CaitlinNovember 28, 2009 at 1:13 PM

    you should continue it. I would like to know what will happen next

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  5. Sophia BarashNovember 28, 2009 at 5:06 PM

    yeah, this sounds like a really good story, well a beginning of it anyway. id like to know what will happen next, so expand expand expand!

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  6. AlainaNovember 28, 2009 at 5:46 PM

    You should continue this, because it makes you want to know what happens next!

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  7. Claire WagnerNovember 29, 2009 at 10:18 AM

    Continue it Maggie I really want to know what happens next. Alos what's the girls name?

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  8. Claire WagnerNovember 29, 2009 at 10:19 AM

    sorry I meant also

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  9. Alyssa MNovember 29, 2009 at 2:53 PM

    As everyone has already said that is a good beginning to a story. I also think you should expand dont forget the rise to power maybe have a new paragraph with that and the tragic flaw and fall, and then have the death or death symbolism in its own paragraph.

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  10. Derek JacobsNovember 29, 2009 at 6:29 PM

    Make it and irony if you expand.

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  11. Delaney McCabeNovember 29, 2009 at 6:48 PM

    I like that beginning and I think you should add on to it because I would love to read more of it!

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  12. MaggieDecember 1, 2009 at 9:47 AM

    When I end up finding the time to I will expand it. NO, I will not make it irony! I also do not know what the girl's name is never thought of one.

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  13. Sammy MarzDecember 2, 2009 at 10:02 AM

    This was really good so far. I can't wait to read more of it!

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  14. Hannah G.December 4, 2009 at 9:39 AM

    Okay Maggie you definatly expand this...It would really make a good story...

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  15. MaggieDecember 4, 2009 at 10:15 AM

    I am not so sure...

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